What I liked best about this story is the dog—Sarge is described so accurately and is such a lovable canine that, as I read, feeling the mounting tension, I was thinking, "Don't let anything bad happen to that lovely dog!"
I found Nathaniel a master of description. I was there in the house with him. However, he has somewhat shattered my dreams of renting a writer's cottage. Overall, great job!
I love a story that makes me read quickly, desperately wanting to know what's going to happen. My blood is pumping!
What I liked best about this story is the dog—Sarge is described so accurately and is such a lovable canine that, as I read, feeling the mounting tension, I was thinking, "Don't let anything bad happen to that lovely dog!"
I found Nathaniel a master of description. I was there in the house with him. However, he has somewhat shattered my dreams of renting a writer's cottage. Overall, great job!